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得分亮点:诗化的语言,自然流畅的结构当鲜花掌声如潮般涌向英雄时,你是否注意过那些窝在角落里、名不见经传的鼓掌者?他们涨红的脸庞洋溢着淳朴的热情,动情的呐喊更是点燃了人们心中的小宇宙。(开篇便直接点明鼓掌者存在的价值,入题迅速)英雄,丰功伟绩,好;鼓掌者,默默无闻,亦好!曾有人问道:世界没有了联想会怎样?现今试问:世界没有了鼓掌者会怎样?(比较中反问,其目的不言自明)没有了鼓掌者,在奥运会上,当中国健儿披上五星红旗的那一
Scoring highlights: poetic language, natural and smooth structure When the flowers bloom into applause, like the influx of Heroes, you have noticed those nest in the corner, the applause applauded? Their red face filled with a simple passion , Passionate cry is lit the hearts of people in a small universe. (Beginning will be directly pointed out the value of applause exist, quickly into the title) Heroes, great achievements, good; Applause, obscurity, Ye Hao! Have been asked: the world will not be like the Association? Now ask: the world did not applaud What will happen? (In contrast, the purpose is self-evident.) Without applause, at the Olympics, when the Chinese athletes put on the Five-Star Red Flag