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尹一书 女，湖南省邵阳市洞口县醪田镇中学教师。在教育教学中认真钻研教材，大胆创新，取得了优良的成绩。
My Vacation
The vacation is coming. I have a plan for my vacation. I’m going to Hainan with my family. I’m going to the beach. I’m going to go fishing in the sea. Ha！Ha！I really like it. I’m going to go swimming in the sea with my parents. We are going to visit places of interest. That sound① very funny！I’m going to play the beach volleyball② with my sister， too. I can play it very well. Oh， we are going to stay there a week③. So you see， it’s really a relaxing vacation. I can’t wait！
湖南省洞口县醪田镇中学193班 邵娟
1. 优点：
对于初中的学生来说，这是一篇不错的假期计划。学生还只学了用be going to…的结构来表示一般将来时，而小作者已经能能很好地运用了。全文内容完整，语句比较流畅，且上下文通顺。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①sound 改为 sounds。句中that作主语，sound作谓语。That为第三人称代词作主语，谓语动词要用第三人称单数。
②play the beach volleyball 要去掉the。球类运动前不加冠词the。
③a week 改为for a week。用介词“for 时间”表示持续的时间段。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。
尹一书 女，湖南省邵阳市洞口县醪田镇中学教师。在教育教学中认真钻研教材，大胆创新，取得了优良的成绩。
My Vacation
The vacation is coming. I have a plan for my vacation. I’m going to Hainan with my family. I’m going to the beach. I’m going to go fishing in the sea. Ha！Ha！I really like it. I’m going to go swimming in the sea with my parents. We are going to visit places of interest. That sound① very funny！I’m going to play the beach volleyball② with my sister， too. I can play it very well. Oh， we are going to stay there a week③. So you see， it’s really a relaxing vacation. I can’t wait！
湖南省洞口县醪田镇中学193班 邵娟
1. 优点：
对于初中的学生来说，这是一篇不错的假期计划。学生还只学了用be going to…的结构来表示一般将来时，而小作者已经能能很好地运用了。全文内容完整，语句比较流畅，且上下文通顺。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①sound 改为 sounds。句中that作主语，sound作谓语。That为第三人称代词作主语，谓语动词要用第三人称单数。
②play the beach volleyball 要去掉the。球类运动前不加冠词the。
③a week 改为for a week。用介词“for 时间”表示持续的时间段。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。