小时候,我在习作《美丽的家乡》中写道:“我的家乡坐落在青山绿水之中,四季鸟语花香,真是美丽极了。”自己觉得非常满意,可老师说,语言倒是优美,就是想不出你的家乡到底是什么样子,与别人的家乡有什么不同。我揣摩老师的指导,最后改成“我的家背靠一座山,山上长满四季常青的松树柏树,但最起眼的是那棵红豆树,远望,那高大的 When I was young, I wrote ”Beautiful Hometown“ and wrote: ”My hometown is surrounded by mountains and rivers, and the flowers are beautiful in all seasons.“ I feel very satisfied, but the teacher said that the language is beautiful, Just can not think of what your hometown looks like and how different people's hometown is. I try to figure out the teacher's guidance, and finally into ”my home backed by a mountain, the mountains covered with evergreen pine and cypress trees, but the most striking is the red bean tree, afar, that tall