高二学生李巍,语文成绩中等,这篇《香山景物记》是他在学习了《天山景物记》,《海市》等课文后写的一篇命题作文。这次作文的要求是以时间、空间为顺序,写一篇以写景为主的复杂的记叙文。李巍的作文,在教师指导下,先后写了四遍,以下是简要的写作过程。在两节作文课上,李巍完成了第一稿。全文共九百字,分三部分。第一部分写小时候跟妈妈游香山,上山后才知道香山并不香,而是一片松海、绿草黄花,泉水在流,知了在叫,景色很美。第二部分,写从远处看,怪石“鬼见愁”高高地竖在群峰之间;因为人小、路远,没有能上去。第三部分,写第二次到香山,直 Senior high school sophomore Li Wei, medium proficiency in Chinese, this “Xiangshan Scenery in mind” is he wrote a proposition essay after learning “Tianshan Scenery Kee”, “sea city” and other texts. The requirement of this essay is to write a complicated narration based on landscapes in the order of time and space. Li Wei's composition, under the guidance of the teacher, has written four times, the following is a brief writing process. In two essay classes, Li Wei completed the first draft. The full text of a total of nine hundred words, divided into three parts. The first part of my life as a child wrote a tour of Xiangshan with my mother. I did not know that Xiangshan was fragrant after coming up the hill. She was a Songhai, green grass and yellow flower. The second part, from the distance to read, rock “ghosts see worry ” tall and erected between the peaks; because of small people, the road far, can not go up. The third part, write the second to Xiangshan, straight