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案例2:好材料没有配料不好吃原来的作文今天我们很奇怪,在作文班笑声不断。我们听丁老师读《最佳家务奖》这篇文章,主人公猫多多特别有趣。到了抄句子的时候,陈致州还在笑。我们看着他抬着头,眯着眼睛在那儿叽叽呱呱地笑,我们也忍不住笑起来。他笑的时间太长了,我跟着笑了一会儿,不像他那样笑,我的笑声有点难听。我觉得陈致州太好笑了。病状:选择这个场景描写很有新意,对同学笑起来的样子描述也还可以,是好材料,可惜分量不足,配料太少,让人感觉意犹未尽。
Case 2: Good ingredients No ingredients Not tasty Original composition Today we are very strange, continuous laughter in the composition class. We listen to Mr. Ding reading “Best Housework Award” article, a lot of heroine cat is particularly interesting. To copy the sentence, Chen was still laughing. We looked at him with his head raised, squinting with his eyes there, and we could not help laughing. He laughed for too long, and I laughed for a moment, not like he laughed, my laughter a bit ugly. I think Chen Chih-Ching is so funny. Symptoms: Select this scene description is very innovative, the description of the classmates laugh is also OK, is a good material, but the weight is insufficient, too little ingredients, make people feel more than enough.