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Mo Yan， who is an uncomparable Chinese writer， won the Nobel Prize for literature in 2012. He was also the first Chinese writer who got this prize in history. When he was interviewed， he said he was only a normal person who could tell stories.
Mo Yan was born in a poor family in China’s rural area. When he was young， he was a little bit inferior because he thought he wasn’t good-looking and his classmates made jokes on his look.That made him very upset. His mother encouraged him to face the fact bravely and not to look down on himself. Mo Yan didn’t let his mother down. He worked hard at writing. He wrote many famous novels， such as Red Sorghum and Children. His success tells us a truth， “Nobody can beat you unless you beat yourself.”
Hold on to your dream and your dream will come true in the end.
何靈芝老师点评：
本文为学生学完模块一语法定语从句之后，用它来进行人物描写的尝试。以下四个优点突出：其一，文章为经典的三段式，即“总体评价—成长历程—思想升华”，层次分明，逻辑性强，很有说服力；其二，第一句中的非限制性定语从句以及第三句中的限制性定语从句使用准确而贴切；其三，人物描写的句式多样，流转自如，使用了定语从句、状语从句、并列句等从句以及短语a little bit inferior“自卑”， make jokes on “开玩笑”，encourage him to face bravely“鼓励他勇敢地面对”，look down on “看不起”，let his mother down “让他的妈妈失望”，hold on to your dream “坚持自己的梦想”，充分地体现了作者出彩的语言功底；其四，作者能够引经据典，名言用得恰到好处，起到了画龙点睛的作用。
美中不足的是有个别语言错误以及衔接连贯欠佳。建议在写作时，第一是不用没有把握的合成词或者查字典核实后再用，如“uncomparable”应该为“incomparable”，第二是恰当使用衔接连贯的介词短语、副词或者插入语，这样文章会更加生动地道。
Mo Yan， the first Chinese writer who got the Nobel Prize for literature， was an incomparable Chinese writer. While interviewed， he said he was only a normal person who could tell stories.
Basically， Mo Yan was born in a poor family in China’s rural area. When he was young， he was a little bit inferior because he thought he wasn’t good-looking， which made him very upset. However， inspired by his mother， he didn’t let his mother down. He worked hard at writing and got many famous novels published， such as Red Sorghum and Children. His success tells us a truth， “Nobody can beat you unless you beat yourself.”
As a consequence， just hold on to your dream and your dream will come true in the end.
Mo Yan was born in a poor family in China’s rural area. When he was young， he was a little bit inferior because he thought he wasn’t good-looking and his classmates made jokes on his look.That made him very upset. His mother encouraged him to face the fact bravely and not to look down on himself. Mo Yan didn’t let his mother down. He worked hard at writing. He wrote many famous novels， such as Red Sorghum and Children. His success tells us a truth， “Nobody can beat you unless you beat yourself.”
Hold on to your dream and your dream will come true in the end.
何靈芝老师点评：
本文为学生学完模块一语法定语从句之后，用它来进行人物描写的尝试。以下四个优点突出：其一，文章为经典的三段式，即“总体评价—成长历程—思想升华”，层次分明，逻辑性强，很有说服力；其二，第一句中的非限制性定语从句以及第三句中的限制性定语从句使用准确而贴切；其三，人物描写的句式多样，流转自如，使用了定语从句、状语从句、并列句等从句以及短语a little bit inferior“自卑”， make jokes on “开玩笑”，encourage him to face bravely“鼓励他勇敢地面对”，look down on “看不起”，let his mother down “让他的妈妈失望”，hold on to your dream “坚持自己的梦想”，充分地体现了作者出彩的语言功底；其四，作者能够引经据典，名言用得恰到好处，起到了画龙点睛的作用。
美中不足的是有个别语言错误以及衔接连贯欠佳。建议在写作时，第一是不用没有把握的合成词或者查字典核实后再用，如“uncomparable”应该为“incomparable”，第二是恰当使用衔接连贯的介词短语、副词或者插入语，这样文章会更加生动地道。
Mo Yan， the first Chinese writer who got the Nobel Prize for literature， was an incomparable Chinese writer. While interviewed， he said he was only a normal person who could tell stories.
Basically， Mo Yan was born in a poor family in China’s rural area. When he was young， he was a little bit inferior because he thought he wasn’t good-looking， which made him very upset. However， inspired by his mother， he didn’t let his mother down. He worked hard at writing and got many famous novels published， such as Red Sorghum and Children. His success tells us a truth， “Nobody can beat you unless you beat yourself.”
As a consequence， just hold on to your dream and your dream will come true in the end.