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Feb. 17， 2014 Cloudy
Dear diary，
Today I had an unforgettable day.
First of all， I’ve got a bad cold because of the heavy rain. It made me really sad， because I used to be a flying bird - playing balls， running， shouting and having great fun with my friends all the day. Life full of happiness went away and the illness is now visiting me with two gifts called fear and pain. I had to stay in the small bed， watching the clouds outside the windows and listening to the birds singing with joy - but not for me. I was in hospital for 2 days. I got used to everything happening here - birth and death， joy and fear， smiles and tears. It soon made me bored because I gradually felt nothing strange.
Then， things began to change. My friend visited me on Saturday. He played cards with me and tried to make me win. I knew he just wanted to cheer me up. I felt really happy because of my dear friend.
Then he told me something terrible， “You have missed a lot of important classes that are difficult for us. But I believe your talent can help you. Although I am weak in studying them， these days I’ve been studying hard to be ready for helping you” he said. I realized that I had missed plenty of classes and it made me worried. He noticed that and said，“Wait a minute. Guess what I bring here to you.”He took out a CD which is from my favorite singer. We played the CD. It really worked fine. My heart felt like a peaceful lake， not a raging sea with strong winds. That made me not so worried. I will try my best to get well so that I can get back to school as soon as possible.
So， it was an unforgettable experience， and I’ll remember it and my real friend forever.
王泉老师点评：本文作者将一个因生病住院的学生的心理变化过程描写得细腻到位；在文章中尝试着使用了一些修辞手法如比喻、拟人、对比与排比等，比较恰当准确。
Dear diary，
Today I had an unforgettable day.
First of all， I’ve got a bad cold because of the heavy rain. It made me really sad， because I used to be a flying bird - playing balls， running， shouting and having great fun with my friends all the day. Life full of happiness went away and the illness is now visiting me with two gifts called fear and pain. I had to stay in the small bed， watching the clouds outside the windows and listening to the birds singing with joy - but not for me. I was in hospital for 2 days. I got used to everything happening here - birth and death， joy and fear， smiles and tears. It soon made me bored because I gradually felt nothing strange.
Then， things began to change. My friend visited me on Saturday. He played cards with me and tried to make me win. I knew he just wanted to cheer me up. I felt really happy because of my dear friend.
Then he told me something terrible， “You have missed a lot of important classes that are difficult for us. But I believe your talent can help you. Although I am weak in studying them， these days I’ve been studying hard to be ready for helping you” he said. I realized that I had missed plenty of classes and it made me worried. He noticed that and said，“Wait a minute. Guess what I bring here to you.”He took out a CD which is from my favorite singer. We played the CD. It really worked fine. My heart felt like a peaceful lake， not a raging sea with strong winds. That made me not so worried. I will try my best to get well so that I can get back to school as soon as possible.
So， it was an unforgettable experience， and I’ll remember it and my real friend forever.
王泉老师点评：本文作者将一个因生病住院的学生的心理变化过程描写得细腻到位；在文章中尝试着使用了一些修辞手法如比喻、拟人、对比与排比等，比较恰当准确。