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A Life Lesson That I Learned
All of us joined together to fight against the disease when COVID-19 hit the whole world in a sudden early this year.
It was a big challenge to everyone， and①no one held back. Many people devoted themselves to fighting against it. The government advised us staying②at home and avoid going to the public places if possible. Doctors and nurses tried their best to save the patients’ lives and take good care of them though they were at the risk of getting infected. People who were willing to help others worked on③ volunteers. They did a lot and were not afraid of the danger they faced.
The outbreak has caused so many deaths that it gave④ me a life lesson： We should cherish every moment with our loved ones.
河北省阜城县第四中学九年级（2）班 宫灵艳
张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师，从事英语教育教学工作31年;多年来，在《中学生英语》《学英语》《英语周报》《中学生英语读写》《中学英语园地》《英语辅导》《校园英语》等省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇论文获奖;曾参与高中版教辅资料《天天向上》和《三维方案》的编写工作;曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号;多次辅导学生在省、市和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。
1. 优点：
本文小作者紧扣主题，开头点出大家一起参与抗疫;接着讲述新冠肺炎给大家带来了挑战，各方一起与病毒作斗争;最后提到要珍惜与爱的人在一起的每一刻。本文文字简明扼要，结构清晰，条理清楚;诸多短语以及定语从句、状语从句、并列句的合理使用，都是文章的亮点。总之，这是一篇值得推荐的习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① and改为but。前后分句之间表示轉折关系。
② staying改为to stay。“advise sb. to do sth.”是固定结构。
③ on改为as。“work as...”表示“担任，作为……而工作”，更符合文章意思。
④ gave改为gives。由于主句时态为现在完成时，从句时态应使用一般现在时与之呼应。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。
All of us joined together to fight against the disease when COVID-19 hit the whole world in a sudden early this year.
It was a big challenge to everyone， and①no one held back. Many people devoted themselves to fighting against it. The government advised us staying②at home and avoid going to the public places if possible. Doctors and nurses tried their best to save the patients’ lives and take good care of them though they were at the risk of getting infected. People who were willing to help others worked on③ volunteers. They did a lot and were not afraid of the danger they faced.
The outbreak has caused so many deaths that it gave④ me a life lesson： We should cherish every moment with our loved ones.
河北省阜城县第四中学九年级（2）班 宫灵艳
张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师，从事英语教育教学工作31年;多年来，在《中学生英语》《学英语》《英语周报》《中学生英语读写》《中学英语园地》《英语辅导》《校园英语》等省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇论文获奖;曾参与高中版教辅资料《天天向上》和《三维方案》的编写工作;曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号;多次辅导学生在省、市和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。
1. 优点：
本文小作者紧扣主题，开头点出大家一起参与抗疫;接着讲述新冠肺炎给大家带来了挑战，各方一起与病毒作斗争;最后提到要珍惜与爱的人在一起的每一刻。本文文字简明扼要，结构清晰，条理清楚;诸多短语以及定语从句、状语从句、并列句的合理使用，都是文章的亮点。总之，这是一篇值得推荐的习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① and改为but。前后分句之间表示轉折关系。
② staying改为to stay。“advise sb. to do sth.”是固定结构。
③ on改为as。“work as...”表示“担任，作为……而工作”，更符合文章意思。
④ gave改为gives。由于主句时态为现在完成时，从句时态应使用一般现在时与之呼应。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。